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Title: Shakespeare Is An Idiot
Author: lawless523 
Pairing: Sanzo/Goku
Rating/Warnings: R for language, sexual content, and bad grammar
Word Count: ~450 words
A/N: Instead of writing a sonnet, I chose to write about Goku's reaction to the sonnet quoted in the challenge. His reaction is shaped by his experiences, which is why there's a pairing in the heading rather than his name alone. Time allotted: 90 minutes. Time taken: 50 minutes, including 10 to look over other sonnets and decide on this one and 5-10 minutes of review and editing.

The expense of spirit in a waste of shame
Is lust in action: and till action, lust
Is perjured, murderous, bloody, full of blame,
Savage, extreme, rude, cruel, not to trust;
Enjoyed no sooner but despised straight;
Past reason hunted; and no sooner had,
Past reason hated, as a swallowed bait,
On purpose laid to make the taker mad.
Mad in pursuit and in possession so;
Had, having, and in quest to have extreme;
A bliss in proof, and proved, a very woe;
Before, a joy proposed; behind a dream.
All this the world well knows; yet none knows well
To shun the heaven that leads men to this hell.


William Shakespeare, Sonnet 129

Hakkai was sitting at the table reading a book. That’s nothin’ unusual; Hakkai reads a lot. I guess it’s ‘cause he used to be a teacher. They’re supposed to like readin’ or somethin’.

He wasn’t payin’ any attention to anythin’ else, so I figured whatever he was readin’ must be pretty interestin’ and asked if I could read it too. He smiled, said “sure”, and handed me the book.

When I looked at it, it turned out to be some poems by some guy named Shakespeare who wrote them in a different language. Someone took the time to translate them into ours. Hakkai said they were all a special kind of poem called a sonnet. When I asked what that meant, he said it had to do with rhythm and rhyme scheme, but it wasn’t really possible to keep to them and translate the meaning of the words properly too.

Hakkai had been readin’ the one hundred and twenty-ninth sonnet. I took a look at it, but the poem didn’t make any sense to me. I couldn’t understand the words too well, so I asked Hakkai to explain them to me.

Then when I understood the words, I couldn’t believe what it said. Did this Shakespeare guy really believe that sex was only good for the moment? ‘Cause that’s not the way I feel about it at all.

The first time Sanzo and me had sex, I felt more powerful than I’d ever felt in my entire life. More powerful than when I stopped Hakkai from rippin’ out his other eye; more powerful than when I whupped Kougaiji’s ass; more powerful even than when I transform into my other self.

Though it had taken a long time and a lot of effort on my part to get Sanzo to that point, I had no regrets, and I don’t think he did either. At least, he didn’t avoid me afterward and he wanted to do it again. I mean, if Sanzo’s willin’ to do it again, it’s gotta be something lasting, right? He’s not the kind of person to chase a momentary feeling.

When we fuck, everythin’ seems more real and vivid, you know? Like all I’d been doin’ up to then was sleepwalkin’ through life. It feels so good and right and awesome.

While the really good part – the one where you come and release all that built up tension – ends soon, the glow lasts long after, and even after that, it changes you. It changes how you feel about the person you’ve done it with.

I can’t explain it very well. I’m not as well versed in usin’ words as that Shakespeare guy. All I can say is that Shakespeare is an idiot.

Sanzo’s warm body curled up next to mine proves it.

/fin/

Comments

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sagtavilia
Apr. 29th, 2010 10:49 pm (UTC)
Ahahaha XDD I must admit, though I like Shakespeare a lot, I am soooooooooo agree with Goku on this fic XD Very good!! An write it in 1st person make the story even better XDD Luv it!!
lawless523
Apr. 29th, 2010 10:52 pm (UTC)
Thanks! I hope you could feel Goku's indignation rolling off the page.
suanz
Apr. 30th, 2010 12:17 am (UTC)
Goku doesn't mince his words, that's for sure.

Lovely!! Thanks for sharing. ^^
lawless523
Apr. 30th, 2010 12:49 am (UTC)
Thank you, and you're welcome. Goku is very straightforward and plainspoken, so I figured he'd go directly to the heart of the matter. Besides, he's listened to Sanzo for years. Now there's someone who doesn't mince words.
kirathaune
Apr. 30th, 2010 02:10 am (UTC)
LOL! Goku analyzing the Bard!

the glow lasts long after, and even after that, it changes you. It changes how you feel about the person you’ve done it with. I liked this line a lot.

Nice job, especially with the 1st person POV! Thanks for sharing.
lawless523
Apr. 30th, 2010 03:11 am (UTC)
You're welcome, and thank you! I got a kick out of Goku telling the Bard off. He would, too; if he can stomach telling Ukoku off after what he did to Sanzo, he'd have no problem dressing down Shakespeare.

I'm glad the first person POV worked. First person POV tends to be disfavored in the Saiyuki fanfiction, though I've often used it in Gravitation fanfiction.
chomiji
Apr. 30th, 2010 02:55 am (UTC)

XD

I'm not surprised that Goku's ideas on the subject don't match the Bard's!

lawless523
Apr. 30th, 2010 03:14 am (UTC)
Hee! Me neither. Thanks for reading.

The sonnet quoted actually originally took me in a completely different direction thoughtwise. I may write that one, I may not. This was probably less tricky to write, though.
jakondas
Apr. 30th, 2010 12:11 pm (UTC)
lovely imagery here and Goku's voice is just so very well done. Love his views, and his articulation of them. I just wanna hug the guy. This put a huge grin on my face, thanks for share hun. I feel all warm and fuzzy now. ^_^
lawless523
Apr. 30th, 2010 02:04 pm (UTC)
Thank you, and you're welcome. You can just feel the seething indignation.

I'm glad my channeling of Goku made you feel all warm and fuzzy.
rhyslynnalkendr
Apr. 30th, 2010 01:15 pm (UTC)
I have to step back from this one
Very entertaining but I've spent 20+ year performing Will at so Goku and I are going to have to agree to disagree on this one. But, kid, I'll tell you this, you and Will are closer to agreement than you realize - expecially when you and Sanzo are curled up (Will's patron when he wrote this was a young, impulsive duke....)
lawless523
Apr. 30th, 2010 02:06 pm (UTC)
Re: I have to step back from this one
Thanks for reading and enjoying. Goku's apt to take things very literally.
pfmoi
May. 3rd, 2010 10:02 pm (UTC)
Awww, this is sweet and makese quite a bit of sense. Go Goku.
lawless523
May. 3rd, 2010 10:45 pm (UTC)
He would react indignantly to this, wouldn't he?

Thanks for reading. (I LOL'd at your icon, btw.)
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